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Old 01-26-2019, 02:58 PM   #5
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Lol

This was funny, semi-clever and an all around pretty good read. I think you did a fairly decent job mimicking dead man’s tone and subject matter, however, the actually wording and overall flow didn’t truly feel like a dead man verse. With that said, parody or not, this was dope....

Quote:
Out of options, I remember Annabelle told me I had a problem
Because it wasn't courage that was shot in my vein,
More like something to stop all the pain
Wet from the rain. I remember you came to my porch
We hit it off darling, the flame to my torch
I remember your skin, fair as a rose petal
You told me "don't settle"
Now I tried giving advice and you told me "don't meddle"
It Is my wish that I could Hold True,
but old wounds won't let me hold you...
Storybook endings. historical references
I guess it was me who said we were ending it
Was it all just lust?
Now I keep thinking of the meaning of "us",
I don't know anymore; the meaning of love
Lol@ “Annabelle” and “historical references” and “-PA”.

Pharaoh, man, if you ever actually gave two shits you’d probably be one of the dopest. Then again who actually gives two shits nowadays anyway? But word. Cool piece.
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