I loved how verse 2 supported and gave clarity and closer to the opening verse. One of the rare drops where I wanted to read more, perhaps a verse 3 to to update what happened after this 'coming of age' experience.
rhymes were good in areas, bland in others. All in all above the average imo, which comes nicely and fits comfortably in with the smoothy reflective tone of this piece.
good drop man, could have extended this further to much benefit. loved the contrasting and complimentary verses.
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What is public must be legit, fit for average consumption, don't forget. What is private is handled by pirates, prying loose profits from prosthetics. To tell the difference between: first remain unseen with a steady breath and hope, then listen to the cracks in the wall with a stethoscope.
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