This was erratic and each time you brought up a context or subject you abandoned it, leaving this feeling rushed and confused.
Like you bring up God, then the next line Harry Potter's weed (really ? is Harr'ys weed that dank ?) lol...only to abandon those to subs to create more undeveloped themes....
I liked the stagger, short flow and presentation, the strong suit of this piece. But with something this choppy (not ness. a bad thing) you really need to glue it together with a strong theme and context that does not abandon ideas in every line...na mean ?
So walking away from reading this I just get a small glimpse that you are a bad-ass ? How so ? I got to believe it, not just read it.
Take this as crit.
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