this was a higher caliber "SHTF" written, as somebody has already pointed out. Having an almost Columbia gold, or south American context or mood to it.
Some what boarder line losing the reader at some points, but overall you quickly piece it all together like a good drop should do to ya. It felt tense and spun tight, maybe needed to relax a bit and come out off the tongue more naturally in places, in areas where you wanted to stress certain points. IOW, change up the cadence.
as of late...searching for various ways to smuggle and allocate
jugglin' hash and weight without the tragic fate of a magistrate
no paper trail or faxes, no chip on my shoulder...just axes
cause Internal Revenue is the mafia fuckin us over with taxes
HA, nice. A lot is said in these four lines...
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