It’s weird because I think if you tweaked it then it could be good. I get what you’re going for if it’s honest and not trolling. Sort of like this.
https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=432ABXfadGw
So I don’t necessarily mind the mumbling sort of style once it’s refined. The lyrics need to be better though, I didn’t like the UP portion. But anyway, I don’t think it’s terrible and I like that you’re doing something different and something you fuck with.