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Old 12-03-2018, 07:04 AM   #13
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Originally Posted by For Battling View Post
The Firefighters Verse:


Fuck 12.

They call me and I’ll come spray everything. You on the other hand aren’t harming jack.
Far from a killer, only time you shoot people is when they’re unarmed and black.

Nice opener to lead off

Always harassing the innocent, planting evidence and taking goods.
I’ll dispatch you quick like disturbances in white neighborhoods.

Lol good follow up line to the last

Dudes stay stealing girls from you. You’re too lame.
I’m not talking about my job requirements when I take out your new flame.

Cool, maybe could have been worded more harshly but I liked it

Chicks like us more than you, there’s no competition.
You’re alone every cuffing season yet it’s in your job description.

This felt similar to the job requirements one to me tbh, both in wording and execution here, which is fine but it’s prob best to have variety between punches save the format feeling stale, you know?

You have no chance of getting past me. You’re going against the best, scrub.
My girls look like playboy bunnies, yours look like Hush playing dress up.

looool much better here

Your salary’s a joke. I wouldn’t risk my life for the amount you’re making.
It’s funny that they call you the pigs yet you can’t bring home the bacon.

Kind of basic at the end, pretty straightforward line to come up with if I’m honest
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