U need Drugs if u think ur not bottom-tier, the field ur in is nothin but slow kids
Cuz if we're talking about DARE Class, it's filled w/ nothing but pre-teens who don't know shit
(This had potential but the diss didn’t really go anywhere. I saw where you were going with DARE class but bottom tier and ‘preteens who don’t know shit’ is a weak association)
U aint making it out the first round, Ima off this lame bastard
The only time we'll say 'Dare lived' is by spelling the 2nd half of his name backwards
(This is okay. One one end it’s kinda creative. But then there needs to be something to tie into ‘lived’ (like a set up bout killing him). Then there needs to be some sort of reason or set up for spelling his name backwards)
Mathew Murdock a gangsta? Nah... Hoes are lost like who's he?
Only shortys claiming that 'Double M G' are some Maybach Music & Ross groupies
(Pretty good concept. Fairly creative. I think your wording on the punch held this back slightly. You coulda used M-M-G instead of double M G and it woulda been less wordy and worked the same. I think you over worded the Mayback Music and Ross groupies part as well)
U aint DC Standard so sit down, don't play - ya words are fraud n' so gay
This Marv'll come w/ more forced shit than an orc-ward & gauntlet wordplay
(My b but I’m missing the reference and just not getting the punch on this one. Went over my head)
Ur suit is the whackest of them all, even ur tailor had trouble w/ seams on the vest
Cuz fat sluts doing cosplay is the only time ur w/ a bitch w/ Double D's on her Chest
(Cool I like the angle. The bar by itself wasn’t crazy but I think you did a good job of really attacking the gimmick and it’s like it builds on the previous bar. Didn’t have any genetics bars - all of them were direct and it’s cool that you kept it up for the whole verse)
Aiyyo
frankly u scared, whole family dyin’ left u sad with despair
now ur forced to live w/ this loss even longer than u had been with theirs
(Alright I like this. The personal angle is nice. The punch was simple but pretty effective. Only critique is i personally think you should mention him losing or something in the set up to make the punch easier to get)
mob blasted ‘em square infront of u, left the bodies ‘n then bounced
..the Costa agents served up three flat whites that left u frothin’ at the mouth..
(I haven’t seen any of the marvel tv shows just the movies so I don’t get this one. Did my best to google it but i don’t get the reference)
i got sonic superpowers, u’ve just a gun so big SMACK rappers be cursin’ crazy
the renegades M16 overshadowed his whole career wayyy worse than Jay-Zs
(My nigga this is fire. I liked the set up - it was funny. The em 16 renegade flip was crazy. Dope bar)
first you Navy Seal then agent S.H.I.E.L.D? still gettin’ beat to a pulp
ur logos seen the result.. two black eyes & only 3 remaining teeth in ur skull
(Yeah this is nice too. You going in right now. Worded nice and flowed well. I like the personal touch in the set up then using his logo as the punch)
miss me w/ ur bullshit, talkin’ grimey like ur lord almighty
..they said u’d been an ex-marine but Im the one leavin’ the Corps behind me..
(This is a good concept. Corps is pronounced core so its a bit of a stretch but I’ll give it a g pass because that’s how a lot of people pronounce it. Nice flip though and good the personal touch adds to it)
I really enjoyed this and like the battle but I got Daredevil taking this one pretty comfortably. Punished had a good verse. The concepts were nice and he used his opponents gimmick throughout the battle which was pretty dope. Wording wasn’t always crisp though which really stood out compared to Daredevil’s and he needed a haymaker or two to make this closer.
Daredevil had a fire verse to me. Nigga was low key spazzing. I think he had better personal flips and angles which is pretty impressive because I feel punished isn’t that popular. That renegade bar was crazy to me and everything else (besides the bar I didn’t get) was at the very least “good”.
Dope verse and enough to take a fairly comfortable win.
Mvgt Daredevil
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