I was feelin' the first half, up until the vasaline brow line... after that I felt like the flow was harder to follow being totally honest.
I'm guessing this piece is talking about people and politics of the site, in terms of respect and frequency of activity by certain members. I get it.
That being said, realize this site has people who've been doing this for a long ass time and their criticism can be helpful.
the standout lines for me is the
Throw in the towel, or lean a little then kneel
Before I continue to box on with that vasaline brow
You use the imagery well here, the phrasing gives a visual depiction of the struggle you're writing about. More lines like this sprinkled throughout a piece will make it read overall more solid.
keep doing your thing.
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