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Old 06-07-2013, 11:29 PM   #5
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Quite...a higher calibur of writing one I am fond of
scattered metaphors and other miscellaneous references were intriguing
the flow was drawn out perfectly to fit your word choice
but after you switched up at the end with a more futuristic vibe...
ehhhh I kinda got turned off...good show though...very good
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