Browsin Netflix w/ ya racist hoe, she on her knees & slobberin'
Ur only tryna watch 'Hold the Dark' cuz it's ur code for keepin hostages
(Lol out the gate. This is funny. I think your set up coulda been a bit better but hold the dark is funny)
Ur washed up, for less than $10 I'll put one on ya mind n blast here
Not expectin change... U'd think I'm in a rush the way I shove that 9 to Cashier
(Liked this one. I liked then less than 10 and not expecting change tie ins. Only critique is with ‘shove the 9’, a 9 isn’t a bill so wording slightly off. Def thing you shoulda used shoved the 5. Still like it though)
Ur SOFT, ain't bout a word u say so why should we be friends
I'd compare u to Karpis, but instead of hate u jus be saying sorry in PM's
(Okay. Good personal angle. I think you shoulda turned this into a harsher flip. It was statementish - which would have been fine if it was a bit more impactful)
This confederate fuck ain't out the window sprayin w/ hot trey clips
Faggot, the only thing u be whippin stays in ya pops basement
(Lol JD clownin. This is pretty funny to me. I think only thing I can critique is that there aren’t very harsh, but sometimes jokes are effective too)
Yall can't afford straps, I'll pull the pump to ya hating friends
Ur broke, the only time we see Cash machine banging is when ur punching on ATM's
(Not bad but the concept is played imo. The ATM concept is used in itself and then it’s a bit too obvious if a cash flip. Executed it pretty well though. This is okay)
U can't handle smoke, I light the flame w/ an Eagle in hand
Ur only familiar w/ 'Trees in Backwoods' from hanging people w/ Gramps
(This okay. Might should have went went a harsher personal here. I typically like when guys expound and continue to use the same angle, but all your personals here were pretty similar. Like they were jokes in the only time you do X is when you (insert racist thing). Not a bad closer, but it lost some impact)
Racism bars! Well drop them and the blood gonna spray, heard me?
Say Wizard one time...And there’ll be red all over John Wall like his fucking away jersey
(I like this one a lot. Good writing here.you knew it was coming and flipped it with the racism angle. The say wizard is a dope tie in. The John wall flip was nice. This was dope)
You keep your bitch locked up in the crib...Won’t see son’s bae leave the house...
That’s why that Trampoline down her gullet...and PRAYS that one day she can Bounce
(If I’m understanding the wp correct “trampoline her gullet down” is awkwardly worded and seems like a bit of a stretch. I thought you tied it in nicely with pray she can bounce. This was just okay to me)
That first pod you sounded like the BIGGEST wigger...ain’t squeezin’ or holdin’, son
Saying “Fa Sho” doesn’t make you sound black....but it’s the ONLY reason you own a gun
(Lol this is good. Good personal angle. The fa show flip was nice)
I’ll clap JD until his whole mid section get hit up...Make this cat just bleed
It’s facts, my G....I’ll Squeeeeze a Round on your stomach like a Gastric Sleeve
(This was a light jab to me. Set it up well. Squeeze a round on your stomach is pretty good. My issue is I think calling round things ‘rounds’ is a combination of a stretch and overdone. I thought it was a creative concept though)
Yeh, I apologized for that racist shit...It made me feel hella bad, son...
I had some Convictions...While YOU’RE named after a gangster and still never had ONE
(This is nice. Once again, you’re predicting the angles he’s going to use and flipping this one. This was so spot on it looks like a feed lol. Anyways, crisp wording. Convictions flip was pretty good)
Your bitch gives me that royal treatment...Yoooo, the hoe workin’ the gawd...
Talk about Service...That slut let me go In and Out more than your phone during the pod
(Another good personal angle. Talk about service is a good tie in. The flip wasn’t crazy but it was good. Overall this is a good closer)
Dope battle.
I enjoy reading JDs bars. He always has creative concepts and well rounded verse. I think he had a lot of clever bars and no real
Misses.
Unfortunately for JD, Cashius was wiggin. JD went with the racist angle and Cash flipped it on him with the prebuttals. The apologizing flip was particularly good because it woulda been harder to predict JD would use that. On top of that Cashius had the better personals.
This was a very good battle. JD came with it but Cashius was in his bag.
Mvgt Cashius
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