I'm Ali to these new texcees, come n get ya grill lumped dummy
No matter what battle Liston, he'll get his jaw cracked till he's floored like Sonny
(Pretty good opener. Wording is crisp. Not a fan of a List for Listen name flip (wouldn’t pronounce the T). The tie ins were good though)
Cash at hand? I'll shame this man, he 's never been able to flash big guap
Only time u 'bantu knots' together is gettin' ya wig fixed at the African hair shop
(Good too. Wording is crisp again. Bantu knots is clever. The tie in a bit long winded but doesn’t take away from the punch much)
I'm bout to let it go, hit ya fam w/ the blam or kill ya peeps really slow?
These 'arms'll leave ya kids breatheless', ill bear hug ya daughter till the bitches head explodes
(This was just okay. It’s like you had two different concepts going - physically squeezing her and shooting her - but you didn’t weave them together well imo)
This cat is wack, couldnt flip a O let alone lift n blast the mac
if he's 'pushing weight', its cuz i buried em alive 6 ft, trapped w/ rats
(I’m missing something. I’m not getting the trapped with rats meaning/connection to pushing weight.)
I'm known for rippin' viscious body shots, man this cat'll be tippin'
Uppercut'll lift 'listen up' like I was trying to get the whole class attention
(Good concept. You could have tied it in stronger. Some wording issues - you kinda gotta just look at the “listen up” part by itself for it to work. This wasn’t bad though. I thought it was a solid closer)
They say big baller Ry a headache, but he got lit up after all
Laid there motionless in a body bag as his concussion protocol
(Lol I didn’t get this one at first. This is pretty good. Headache is a good tie in. My only issue is you calling the tent a “body bag”)
Get bodied closed casket after fumes from the boiler room,
It was a cold call and enough Diesel to leave you without a view
(I’m getting the reference and catching the tie ins but the connections are too loose. The wording isn’t clean and it’s not clear what you’re saying.
Now you wanna knuckle up? Your hand game is wus & scrawny
& if we being honest Ry, I’ve seen more GAIN(s) at a hood laundry
(Lol this is okay. Slightly basic but the concept is funny. Wording is hindering it a bit too)
Cocky fuck that big head look like 'shoot at me apparel'
Give you a REAL reason to be gas'd…from dodging my barrel
(This was just too basic of a flip. Big head was a good tie in but punch was too basic)
Kill yourself! I swear to God… that’s your number 1 civic duty
if I was Ry I’d be on suicide watch like seeing a bad Smith
(I don’t get this at all)
Ry came with it and took this by a comfortable margin. His wording was very crisp and had good concepts while I think listen had okay concepts and struggle with the execution. Rhyno takes this one pretty comfortably.
Mvgt Rhyno
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