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Old 10-06-2018, 02:09 PM   #6
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Originally Posted by PancakeBrah View Post

The shotty liberal.
Long winded when it's triggered
a college student

This was cool

Student of the game
It'll take advantage quick
Aiming head down will

Aight not seeing big gun bar influence on this one

create an assault
Mix your upstairs with downstairs
Missus Blasey Ford

Cool
Quote:
Originally Posted by Innovator View Post

Pull triggers heavy
The lead weighs them down with ease
6 feet bedsheets, sleep.

Cool

Put rounds to yah head
Riddle shots to your conscience
Scars burned memories

I dig this

Bullets stck to bone
The calibers saturate:
A soul melting heat.

Cool
I'm leaning more Innovator on this one

All three of his were more relevant to the topic imo while still being creative

If Pancake had a couple more like his 1st haiku it would've been a lil closer of a battle

2nd was cool & 3rd was dope just didn't have much to do w/ guns

Also I was gonna say your first line in your first haiku was 6 syllables but I can see how it would go both ways when it's said
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