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Old 09-24-2018, 02:18 PM   #3
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lmao pretty sure this is just that Rap-Royalty guy

he tends to be on his religious shit from time to time

this one isn’t him at his best

too many rhymes ending in the same word, repeated

obv meant to be all poetic sounding but just comes off a little hackneyed and maybe lazy

word choice isn’t interesting enough to keep the readers interests either and it’s convuluted with poor structure and line breaks that ruin the rhythmic flow

not the worst thing I’ve ever read but just tryna be real

he’s better than this piece makes him out to be

it reads like a keystyle
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