I thought this was close both being gun bar attack lines.
JB's was kind of a reach. The barrel doesn't spin on a revolver. The cylinder does. So wording right there kind of hurt the bar for me, all though many wouldn't know that and I knew what you where you were TRYING to go with this - I did enjoy the imagery your bar provided. Plot's setup had a lot going on, I think he could've cleaned that up a bit to help his concept have more of an impact.
This is mad close but I think from a technical aspect and enjoyment factor Jab will get my vote here barely.
v/Jabari Black
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