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Old 01-28-2013, 07:28 AM   #4
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Originally Posted by Split View Post
"I think this aquarium's bigger than the last one"

every technological acheivement,
philosophical soap box thesis,
offering me no soft egress.
only thoughts like sliding pieces.
the space between the lines we shift.
breeze, timelessness, whitewash colors,
freshest style. test tube vials not uncovered.
bless you, tiles, sleep on holy linoleum with a woven bathmat,
exfoliating lab rats, shots of Stoli numb their cataracts.
they won't see or feel the lack of meaning,
with every sip fleeting from just the tip of what we feed em.
Love that opening verse...

Split I dig on the vocab you using, it gives you a great route into some interesting rhymes schemes.
It flows nice and there are some interesting thoughts running through there, some nice concepts that may be lost on some niggaz.

Going with the above I have to say that the bath mat/cataracts line sticks in mind after reading. Not sure what it is about it cus i aint baked like the above ;) but its some well wrote shit. You can tell this aint a rushed peice or just some random ramblings, its polished and you can tell that from how well it reads.

Loving the rat close, an what i also liked was how the opening verse was so good its not hard work to keep reading, but the fact you kept that going the whole way through...


Dope drop be keepin an eye out for more.
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