I really enjoyed this Split. There was awesome imagery you incorporated, for some reason the bath mat reference really stuck with me, maybe because I'm pretty baked, anyways. You also used a really unique rhyme scheme that I liked a lot. There are times when you can almost predict the way a scheme is going to go but you kept the reader guessing. One of my favourite parts of the verse were the allusions to the flaws of humanity. They were strung throughout the verse and were well thought out concepts that fit in where you put them. And finally, you had some thought provoking lines that were memorable. I'll finish with an example, and one of the better lines of the verse IMO,
"The divide between effect and cause, cure and vaccination,"
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