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Old 09-21-2018, 12:55 PM   #3
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Jesus. Imagery you conjured up with this is insane.

Some highlights for me:

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Originally Posted by Frank View Post
Stooping down to your elevation to get an observational view
Devastation and doom: angels flew ablaze and a swoop
Revelations, ancient calculations, patiently waiting for doom
Chained at the waist, they’re taking you through the stages of truth
Realizational loops.

Adam & Eve forsaking the fruit, Satan is raising—displaying the flute
Playing to the vacant stadium entertaining the mute
The waste of the sewers over-flowing escaping
The remains of the tombs gutted in a momentous wave through a womb
Ruins in shambles, bow and arrows, razor toothed saber-tooth on the loose
Space boots on the roof—big foot running out of the woods—jumping straight for the moon

Breath taking debut, dazed and aloof, concentration acute
Music to a bloody ear: only an M80 could soothe
Stench looms from a good buddy slumped in his bravery goop
The remains of the troops are making their way through Hades
Mother Nature, the calendar dates, wait, they were true

In stage 2 of Hypothermia— deranged and subdued
Hanging from a strain of DNA—
Civilization
I could have just quoted the whole thing. I'm surprised this got slept on. Actually, no I'm not... smh.

Well done.
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