I spit fire, I'm a dragon with these flames that you get fried in
You're a game designer...that's ironic...cuz u look like someone created you in Skyrim
(I liked the dragon scheme in the set up. Tied to the punch nicely. The punch was kinda funny but wasn’t crazy funny. Set up def helped this)
This racist fuck takes Daddy's money n thinks it makes him tough...u can lose that all in a night, coward
Cuz my boys'll put two 'Ks to K...and take all of this white's power.
(This was okay. The one letter name plays feel a bit cheap to me because it’s really basic. Execution was good though. Take all this whites power was pretty good way to end the punch)
Your wife's the kinda girl that ppl say is rly pretty...on the inside
And if they say that she's a princess...they mean Fiona... after midnight
(Lmao good angle. This is funny. Pretty on the inside is hilarious. Good bar)
You wanna be Hush sooo bad...but u ain't the main attraction...more like the secretary, bro
It's like this shit is Sonic...Knuckle's only ever the secondary role
(Not bad. Wording was crisp. I liked the angle but the flip felt a bit basic)
I'm a savage still...put me with the best...I HAVE to kill
This faggot'll think it's all fun n games til that beam on his chest like Jacksonville.
(My word. No crazy wp - or no witty flip this is just savage af. This a good closer to me)
Don't talk it if u can't walk it, cus if I check ya & ya fake you'll die
Pull up to ya crib in the forine & wave the heat out the window like grandma baked a pie
(Lol I follow you. The reference was funny. Feels a bit forced though because you wouldn’t refer to it as “waving the beat”. Solid opener though)
Put ya head through the coffee table, then stab ya with every shard - this shit is gory
Fam find ya in the living room droolin' w/ spikes in ya head like they turned on rick & morty
(Good imagery - you really set this up up well. I will say, similar issue as above in that caking shards spikes feels forced. The concept and imagery carried this though. This is pretty good)
I don't do the fam dissin'. Ya gal dope, so I'mma take her if u test me
In ya own damn bed droppin' bombs w/ a fox under me, & u can't even pull that off on Netcees
(Lol this is good. Wording doesn’t work perfect both ways (specifically the dropping bombs part) but this was creative)
Then my homies hittin' next - that bitch a party & shes in her glory, joker
This ain't the gram, but we'll have a ring around her face & keep tappin' til the stories over
(This is creative. The ring around her face and keep tapping is a good flip. The imagery is....weird....lol but this is clever)
Tell u to leave & ya life spared, but thats a lie cus we known to shoot
You'll step outside just to see some sticks above ya head like the patio got a pergola roof
(Had no idea what a pergola roof was before this bar. This was just okay to me. Creative. ‘See sticks above ya head’ just ain’t doing it for me. Might have seen the wrong pic but I wouldn’t call that a stick so felt a tad forced)
Enjoyed both verses a lot. Dope stuff from both but I think Knuck has a few more standout lines and a more consistent verse overall.
Mvgt Knuck
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