DMS is very clever and can actually rap imo. Unfortunately, you came light here. Flow and rhyme scheme was good. Tanning bed was basic and heat/tanning bed flips have been done a good bit. ‘See the light’ made the punch better but still pretty light to me.
Lol Viper this was pretty good. 9 bang on hips /spoiled brat is pretty nice. Shooting him in the hip is a weird though and takes away a bit. There’s just no reason to be aiming at anyone’s hip. Personally think you should have changed the word to say bang off your own hip (like shooting from your hip) or something. Punch still landed though and I got your taking this one.
Mvgt viper
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