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Originally Posted by BodySnatcher

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If I roll up in ur hometown…

My new gun'll catch a body. I’m up in ATL just to spray son
U’ll see the Hawk on ur chest Sooner than later...nigga this Trae Young
-ok
But if we’re talking drive-bys...then I got ur head in my range
So I’ma roll up & put a 'nickel in ur mug' cuz ur life is begging for change
-ok
My burner will send rounds down ur lane w/a bowler handle
So if sun rolls up...then I’ma let him 'absorb more heat' than a solar panel
-son/sun na
U smelled the belt for a week but that'll all be a blur soon
To me a shipment...putting u in a hearse & scent in a box like perfume
- could have been fire, like perfume was not the finisher
Shit, if ‘Dy rolls’...it’ll be an execution cuz my straps realer
This stick will push ur shit back to the end of the table like a craps dealer
- ok
Put up ur wifey in a bet. Cuz if u really wanna battle, fuck it
By nightfall, she’ll be howling as I’m ‘doggin the walls’ like a shadow puppet
-ok
I got my arm extended to ur throat...nigga, ur soul’s mine
After '2 clips leave him hanging by a thread' like he ran into my clothesline
- finisher was bad again
I’m taking bets & ur waving the white flag. Boy, u'll die first
Cuz we know where everybody’s Cashius...& it’s nowhere near Diverse
-cash is a dead wordplay
Stick bigger than ur family tree. It’ll clap till ur dome is blown
I’ll plant miCz & put his seeds in the air like the Bird Lady in Home Alone
-ok
Flow, JB & now Dy...I left all these niggas dead from the mag
I’m like a vendor collectin coins how I’m leaving w/ all these heads in a bag
- too broad these rarely work

Originally Posted by DynamiCz

Lets stop the jiving...Jabari Black name flips kept you surviving
When i flip somethin! The machine lift body in the air--Indoor skydiving
-ok
You gotta prove me! All my friends dead when i slide this Lil Uzi
When i give a couple clips inside the whip, it ain't a Drive In Movie
-dope
Never forget! When i carry the stick, don't even question legit
I get to aiming the shit....that mean the gun on body like a weapon permit
-predictable but ok
The nina bad as a model..I fire! The bullet cooking out the knozzle
This light ain't for charcoal! I'll have his top red like a Kingsford bottle
- concept was eh, wording was not good
AR hang like a midget down my calf! I keep the pole low like Ralph
Gun butt...leave body structure in dents like i started a paragraph
- This doesn't rhyme lol
Im in the streets..State Trooper! See you in traffic..i will shoot ya
Spot his 2 door..an lean the can over the sunroof like the Redbull Mini Cooper
-dope LOTB
Glad you made it this far! I take the hostage route when i plug a star
Big ass rope....that u'll pull bodies across the surface like tug of war
-ok
I can spot BS a mile away...lurker! Watching Phone Booth helped this murder
In the window with a sniper...looking through more scopes then a biolab worker
-not sure on the phone booth reference, unless the guy was a biolab worker?
U'll need a eulogy! Big bully...right before he die im snatching his jewelry
The laser tag him...when i flash lights in the building like mall security
- simple
You see what im holding..looking like a medieval knight when im strolling
The blade come out in the shop! I let it chop body down like the car stolen!
-ok

This battle fire, I literally hit refresh again after voting and tilted tf out.

Body, you had a couple could have been flames. Shipment and clothesline but dame the wording was just off. I know you have a formulaic style of writing but those needed a twist, they ended lacksadasically. Consistent stuff, nothing crazy, good verse.

Dy, that red bull shit was fire, I haven't seen that before. Your consistency was on point, only true miss was the non rhyming line but that's only because it didn't rhyme lol. I really liked this verse, this was quality stuff.

DynamiCz