[bleak]

Originally Posted by DMS

Gun so big, I got a cannon at my shoulder like Michael Vick, bullets knock him back farther than a Josh Allen throw
My ruling on this field is always upheld surprised you took some timeout, do not challenge, bro.
-punctuation plz first of all lol. You maybe should have kept the setup general, so im not expecting a flip on those specific players. I get where it was going but no

I’ll be showing him the stick whiles he’s in bed, don’t try n hide brother, just like with Dy’s mother I’m close
Maybe just cock the bat, since I’m a fly swatted, if Dy wanna go, this bugs insides might color my cloths
-Since I'm a fly swatted? Did u mean swatter? Need to proofread just like KS. Besides that, too much.

I won’t rest the gat until his body’s 6 feet in land and nothing on his Stone slab is written.
At a party, it’s like high school student who hate Chemistry lab, ain’t no body glad when ‘mics in.
-mix wp's don't really work with Dy, it just isn't enough to justify a partial nameplay. Respect the setup too could have tied in some more. Expand ur concepts.

All my guns accord, I’m wired to kill, if you don’t think I’ll brawl all out yet
I’ll be putting metal in you n never get a charge, that’s what we call a broken wall outlet.
-i like this one, the wired to kill was a cool way to tie in, this is what u need to stick to.

Originally Posted by bleak

DynamiCz:

Change ya tone..or have the led mark you a X-that's a chromosome
Headshot..When this instrument in my hand create a concussion..it aint a idiophone
-instrument concussion is pretty played
Imma get you gone...the trey five on each side of his cheek...Home Alone
Gun literally big as human! The 38..keep eyes on this 19 year old like a chaperone
-gun literally big as human fucking slated me lmao. This shit is simple effective
3-0? Today the surge die! U'll be shock...they thinking the lost why
Laser beam...it's cause i sat a lite through his chest like The Cable Guy
-maybe sat a lite on his chest but not through, damn. Also the wording. Like was the cable guy carrying a satellite? Why is it through his chest? Maybe I'm overthinking.
I grab the knife, catch ya pops drinking his beers...make him beg for life
Then i snatch ya moms up! She'll be missing out a Full House-Danny Tanners Wife
-Mrs. Turner was never missing, she died. Right? Or idk its cool tho it works
Circle back, if the witness told...im talking mid convo right before he fold
Flash from the cam..then clips catch him confessing at the table--First48 Episode
-i like this
I got you nervous...black mask with the machete! At ya door on some purge shit
The machine dispose all..when I hang off the truck dumping like a sanitation service
-yes

DMS getting better for sure. Dy had enough here I think but next week you need more like those last 2. Not like the gunbar aspect just the wording was better. I over read ur verse I think it's late lol u got it tho

Dy