Really good battle here fellas.
Plot, your wording has been crisp af these past few weeks. Flowed very well. Shot in front of the world is subtle but it’s a slick tie in and I liked it. Also, the concept was fresh to me.
My critique is the ‘boom in your face wording’ comes of a tad forced to me. You wouldn’t really use that phrase to describe shooting someone or to describe editing in a sound effect. We still get it though so that’s why the punch worked. Overall, the punch was nice.
Dy, I’m a fan of punching in the set up. Clips/movie flips have been done to death but that’s a pretty creative way to flip it. I don’t think folks actually understand what that punch is saying but that’s partially your fault cus you coulda used a few more word to make it more obvious. Still that’s a good punch especially for a set up
Second line, the imagery was dope. And the punch was clean. My critique is I’ve heard poetry/snap flips. None done like this so I wouldn’t say it’s played but that took away some of the impact.
Overall, this is extremely close. Plot had the better flow and I think the concept was fresher. Dynamicz has he cleaner punch, and he punched in the setup as well. For me I think how you end the punch plays the biggest role in how impactful the punch is. Dynamicz punch imo was slightly heavier because the wording at the end of Plots punch. This one was really close but I edged it to Dynamicz.
Mvgt Dynamicz
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