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Lenox bro I told u that u have to expand on ur concepts. The spoof shit can work if u make it clear what a spoof is using context. You have tried to make these disorder bars work every battle and it never does so u gotta switch it up. Focus on an affliction, something we can cling to instead of just ur own jargon. Trust me my guy shit here is all about imagery and shit doesn't connect if the voters don't see what u were trying to do. It may be flames to you but if the voter isn't on the same page as u then it's never gonna land.

You gotta have at least one other worded version of every bar unless that first one is just naturally fire. And you can't assume that everything u write is naturally fire when a site full of ppl is telling u otherwise. You can't blame it on the voters when it's literally everybody.

And yes, DMS had stretched lines but that taco shit was HARSH. He used a lot of space but it was effective. You are too worried about adapting to an NC style. That shit happens naturally, word counts go down and u become more effective in a confined space. AK the king of mini bar but he wasn't good overnight lol

DMS