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Old 07-21-2018, 03:54 PM   #14
Jabari Black
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Bleak had a nice little concept. It was a little hard to grasp imo. It wasn’t that your wording wasn’t bad but the setup could have been better. The concept was good though and had a few decent tie ins. Overall solid.

Chyeahhh your bar was a little harder to grasp. First line was pretty funny. I think the second line was pretty scattered. I get that you were going for a Bags flip. I get the Ghost Recon game part but I’m missing the double meaning f recon.

Overall I got Bleak. I think Chyeahhh’s concept had a lot of potential, but bleak had cleaner wording and better execution

Mvgt Bleak
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