Chyeahhh - everything up to the punch is good. Bad spades partner and gay snake charmer is funny. The concept for the punch is funny but the way you worded it was a head scratcher to me. The ‘special 2k scorer’ could have easily been simplified to something like ‘2K player’ and been much easier to understand and a lot cleaner. Overall it was okay but you definitely fumbled it.
Schade’s wording was a even bigger head scratcher. ‘Fifths’ doesn’t work. You don’t call hands 5ths. I say head scratcher because you could have easily used ‘2 fives’ - which literally has the same meaning in this context and would make the punch work.
That plus, I’ve heard the concept before (it was ‘10 open up on ya face’ and not ‘2 fifths’ but still). Then I think the tie ins were a bit forced. Pretty sure Schad rushed his punch. The concept was enough to win the battle but you I don’t think you put as much effort into it.
Mvgt Chyeahhh
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