Got no-showed my last battle...U hit me up like "who u want next?"
Sent u a shit emoji & now we're here...I assume u got the context
(Lol bruh this nigga Twodrop is funny. Good opener)
U pale Racist hick...Pull the burner out n' suppress this guy's breathin'
Put a Foreign his face - Make him uncomfortable for ALL the right reasons
(The wp is cool but you didn’t close it out strong enough imo. ‘Make him uncomfortable for all the....’ wasn’t strong enough tie in imo. This is just okay)
N ur Talent? I do Nazi it... S'medics needed when I burn ur concentration
Since he gas'd up I'll curb stomp his enthusiasm if Hebrew up confrontation
(This is pretty good. I don’t think the nazi wp was particularly good but you had enough word association/wp to carry the bar. Hebrew up confrontation was simple but i liked it)
Fking cuck w/ a 'Braveheart'...Wifey callin' cuz I fuck the bitch proper
U gladly signed the slut over on wedding night w/o enacting Primae Nocta
(Hmm this was okay. ‘Cuck with a braveheart’ is a forced tie in imo - kinda just thrown in there to make the punch land. It was okay though)
Got a Holy pump that'll lift ur soul up...Saving this man'll be simple
Exorcise the shotty til' this pussy screamin' 6 voices like Anneliese Michel
(This is a good concept. ‘Screaming 6 voices’ once again is just kinda thrown in there to make the punch work. Exorcise this shorty is kinda slick. Overall I think this was okay too)
40-year old virgin...lives at home w/ moms but u ain't gotta stress son
U'll hit ya stride soon & be knuckle deep in pie...next time auntie requests 1
(Kinda funny. Not as effective as the opener. Somewhere between okay to light jab)
I'm glad we finally head to head but listen bitch I am not a nice guy
My line put Two in the dirt, get dropped for the score, we ain't slappin high fives
(Dang this was nice but you kinda...fumbled (lol) the punch at the end. You prob shoulda found a way to end the line with ‘my line out two in the dirt’ and built the punch around that because that part was slick)
Quiet at first now makin dumb posts like "shit no one bumps dude!"
Its ironic cuz when I saw it in the disc. forum...It made me think of you
(This was just okay. Not a bad angle but you needed to do more here. As is, it felt kinda basic)
I'm gaining traction here you already hit your peak, and losen it slow
Its getting pumped lately really just a car with no gas, flat out refusin to go
(Hmmm this was real light. I thought the ‘flat out refusing to go’ part would have been a miss but I think you had enough tie ins to make it decent. Gaining traction a little subtle tie in - I see you)
Murder scene in full effect both you and ur bitch get the ticket bruh
So when I'm cruisin with Two rolled up that's a full Honda civic trunk
(This is pretty nice. Idk if you can consider the seats ‘rolled up’ but I’m giving you the pass. This is a good name flip)
You think its Humerus when these clowns jump ship, Ahoy Sailor!
Rip those bones out then put my teams logo on it, I'm a real noise maker
(I liked where you were going with this but the execution let you down here)
Had a chance for the champ match been falling off ever since
Inc the God, take ur blessings another way...nothing you wrote was heaven sent
(This was light at best. The punch was extremely basic imo)
This was a good battle. A lot closer than I expected. Two has been flying under the radar and had been trending upwards for a while. Between this league and the 1-2 league, incredible has been getting better and better as well.
Two, you’ve GOT to keep up the jokes and humor. That certainly can be a signature style for you. I think you def got the talent to become top tier if you keep working on your execution and wording.
Inc, this was a dope showing bro. You’re def getting better. You’ve had some dope concepts you just gotta iron out the kinks when it comes to wording. You def had some dope stuff like the Honda line.
Overall, this was a good battle. I got two drop with a few less misses and edging this battle.
Mvgt Two
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