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Originally Posted by Exis
Ayo,
I've better moves than you maneuver with, your losin' grip
loosen shit up with Metamucil if
Your stuck when droppin' like bowel movements is
I've a balcony you can fall from son, or get pushed on over
Might as well just launch yourself off of the roof then & have Hell pull you closer
Literally get downwards with this, minus any hands held out to assist
Any kid thinkin' that goin' South be the route to make them undoubtably sick
Is a clownin' ass bitch...
Your so not where I wanna be
Stuck in a line behind freaks, alcoholics & fuckin' fiends
Claimin' a welfare cheque
"Next Please! Your here for Health Care yes?"
"Wait, what? Nah...I'm a mod on Netcees
Just wanna say I've got a job now so these benefits is not what Zelph needs!"
All the fuck that Ex sees on this forum is how he a poet
I don't write poems you faggots only rawness & every coward here knows it
I leave the depressed emo rhymes to BB, Dull & Black
Stuck in their little fuckin' cul-de-sac
Figurin' out which alias to use on upcomin' tracks
Whilst rubbin' each other's back
& wrinsin' suds off of the balls from Bags for rep,
Is a cunt like act.
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Really dug how u started this off with the manuaver grip line. Like the flow and the multis we're cool. You're better than you lead on to be. Some grammar and shit needs to be worked on b.c that can affect the flow for readers, if ur doing audio it's lil different. Nice flow and imagery thru out and the grammar I'm talking bout, like that Zelph line I had to read a couple times to catch the flow right. But not bad man I'd be down to text collab in the future if u wanted