Knife tucked when I stroll ya block. License to carry if it gets loud
If u feeling froggy take half off a vet nigga - that's a military discount
(This would have been dope but this has been done before. Gotta count this as a miss)
In the gym since ur proposal. Still fat now wifey can't take the shit
Ur bride said she'd need MOAB's...& that bomb ended the relationship
(Hmmm this was okay. The personal touch was good. The ‘she said she’d need more abs’ is awkward to me. I’m kinda nitpicky when it comes to uses phrases that don’t sound natural. Concept just seemed a bit odd. The wp checks out though so it wasn’t a miss - just okay)
No1 cares bout' ya mid-life crisis. Ask 'my little friend' for advice..
Couple shots'll put ur mind to rest it's Ballistic therapy for a price
(I like where you’re going but I don’t think there was enough to ‘ballistic therapy’ into the punch. Might have been different if ballistic therapy was like a form of therapy but it isn’t to my understanding. Also, idk if it was intentional or not, but I do like that ‘ballistic’ loosely ties back to the last punch. Little subtleties like that are dope. Overall, miss to okay though)
Bitch a freak n give the best head. Got pics but why this jerk wanna test it
One message could put Blue back on the market like Heisenberg resurrected
(Ha! This is dope! ‘Blue back on the market’ is a clever concept. Only critique is the idk if ‘Heisenberg resurrected’ was the best way to end the punch - specifically the “resurrected” part. Dope line though)
Chris Kyle w/ the rifle or grab the pump to make this nerd fly
Give a fuck what he's tripping on...the BANG will open up his third eye
(This was okay. I like the concept. There needs to be a stronger tie in to ‘open up third eye’. It’s one of those things where you won’t typically associate third eye with a drug trip, but then you’re like “ehh I guess it works”. Imo needed a bit more to push it over as a dope bar. Okay)
Just got married to the only girl that would put up w/ ur laziness
If she's feeling a little Blue - it's becuase she has to deal with ur baby dick
(Feeling Blue is a really played concept so you’re going to have to say something crazy for a feeling blue line to hit. Unfortunately, this one wasn’t crazy enough for it to get a pass imo)
Zero contribution to any league. I'd rather have Joe Boston back
So I don't want to hear anyy 'lip faggot'... When u just lost to that
(Lol this is funny but the execution to the punch was off. Rather have joe Boston back is funny to me too)
Not above politics. I'll take an ez win while ya'll stroke this geek
BET I won't @
Incredible for the DQ.. If I don't see 3 Blue votes this week
(LMAOOOO this is funny af! You prob threw people off by wording it “Bet I won’t...” but that’s how niggas talk where I’m from so I heard you loud and clear. But yeah wording coulda been cleaner but this so funny)
strapped like a backpack? a buoyancy bar? shit is haunting me yo..
mother'fucker u were a De-feat line away from me not even wanting to show
(Ha! I’m feeling this as a opener - this was funny and true)
weak drop after weak drop proves that u suck w/ the flows..
been such a Rough Dispatch for you lately ur about to drive a truck off the road
(Didn’t care for this. The wp works fine but it seemed forced because you wouldn’t typically say someone has a “rough diss patch”.)
it's sad really, w/ every drop the stock of this bitch it just plummets..
tries Asbestos he can but any exposure to'em only leaves us sick to our stomachs
(This was cool. Wp checks out. Wasn’t off the wall crazy but I think it’s a punch landed. Your wording is very crisp and I think it can elevate what would otherwise not be a great concept)
who have u beaten?! names prove i'll take this win to the bank..
shit Lenses prolly the biggest & i need hi-tech Glasses to even see him in the ranks
(This was good. The concept is clever - the word play was good, and everything tied in together well)
filmed me fuckin ya bitch so hard a pull in my hammy was felt..
& now we're scared of prosecution, cuz we 'Shot XXX' in a Car in Miami as well
(This was pretty dope. This is a good current event flip)
she BEGGED for the dick so i beat that pussy up for four days..
no BA but you can still be an Ice Cream Champ.. u got one hell of a Sore-Bae
(This was okay. The Sorbet wp came off smooth. Unless ice cream champ has some meaning I’m missing, it seems forced in there as a tie in. Once again wording is crisp though)
hasta la vista if he decides he wanna cop gats n brawl..
i got Shotgun Offense, buck shots at his Spine til there's no DropBack at all
(Pretty good. Concept is very nice and I like the name flip. Once again though, you wouldn’t use the phrase “til there’s no (persons name) back” so I think that takes away from the bar. The line was good despite that though)
wet em up while he’s on a date with a pump in his hood..
the Long-Nose’ll send his Bird Flyin.. then Tucan get dumped in the Woods
(Somewhere between ehh and okay. Long nose / Tucan concept wasn’t fresh. Also the wp isn’t that clean when said out loud.)
I think this experience difference showed in this battle. As far as concepts, y’all are where neck and neck, but Blue’s wording was very crisp while I think Two fumbled some of his punches. For that reason, Blue’s verse just came off as more consistent and he was able to take the battle because of it.
Two you almost there bro and bout to start being a problem for niggas. I feel like your flaw has been you’ve been using safe and sometimes played concepts but that wasn’t really the case here. Now you just gotta clean up the wording - but you’ll get there. Good showing.
Mvgt Blue