I'm not sure why you do this /? If it's there to signal the end of the line, got it but its not needed...it's pretty easy to tell where things close off man...I'd do away with that tbh.Thought your wordin' is a little up & down, same as the multies...for me personally that took away from the flow...havin' said that I like the emotion & imagery, it's like you have all this detailed shit in your mind yet when transferrin' that to a piece the transistion isn't a smooth one, you have good concepts & you can obviously rhyme, I've commented on stuff of yours a few times pretty favorably as I recall...just need to tidy things up fam.
Stay upwards yeah.
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