[Pent uP]

bruh. alright. there were multiple grammar errors that wouldn't make sense even if you were spitting with like a southern drawl (kinda like I thought the beat would warrant), or whatever accent. (oh yeah, assuming the first beat). Just a thought about it and then ill move on - clean it up before posting it..double check and whatnot. On to finer things.......This verse was written by like 3 different people I swear. The beginning is like this imagery that dives into some nature is beautiful lion king foliage type shit, the middle hits like (again) some southern rapper swag, and then the ending turns into some 2pacalyptical shit. Really different to have those three writers voices all in one train of thought. There was some awkward wording that I suspect was done for "effect" but comes off as cheesy (like saying h20 on trees as opposed to using precipitation or dew or just outright water [based on whatever syllable count or rhyme you were considering...there are choices you know?] to sound....smart? idk). Things like that need to get cleaned up and the rest of the verse will fall into its thematics I feel. Keep elevating