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Old 06-18-2018, 09:30 PM   #5
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man that last line is so multi-faceted. Firstly it can mean that she feels nothing, because you feel nothing because you're dead in the scenario. Thats fucking cold on so many levels alone wtf. wild. Secondly it could mean she is mourning for you, which is like a projected way of saying what you hope/expect out of the world on your way out - which is some lowkey breaking the fourth wall slick shit to say. Lastly it could mean that her emotions reflect exactly how cold she is inside by not even paying attention to burying you and exploiting her vanity through that line. And that scenario (if true) exploits how dope the previous 3 or so lines are for setting it up like that. That ending was cold as fuck dude. The main stanza started out with a dope couplet too. I dont get why you do this ABCB rhymescheme thing but thats you. Interesting phrases and raw attitude my dude. Keep elevating
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