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Old 06-04-2018, 01:56 AM   #16
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Man, reading this right now has left me all kinds of fucked up.
I enjoyed this, as a reader I can relate to the emotion you convey.
its poetic mannerisms evoke something that make ones eyes widen.
recollection of connecting events are something common it seems
different variation of course, but this is an overall amazing piece.
the way you lead into the next rhyme is fun to witness.
its a roller coaster based on a roller coaster
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