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Old 06-01-2013, 03:14 AM   #8
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I liked this man, seemed a bit simple at times an flow was kinda choppy but the content was original an had a nice lil twist to it. I think you could have done alot more with it tho like extended each day and given more detail about the relationship the death and the cheating back stories. Still a solid drop for something with line limits for just and comin drop you def could have added more depth. Good job man keep it up
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