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Old 06-01-2018, 08:14 AM   #44
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I’m takin candy from babies & in return I leave`em eatin pistols
Hit this Airhead with heat seekin missiles & when this Starburst he'll start leakin Skittles

Nice reference to the pic full of fruity colours, the wordplay works too, not as strong an opening as muffs but not bad at all

Nigga looks like he failed study hall writing a new ballad on how to shoot rapid
These are culinary school pics…he went from bein prep & straight to fruit salad

Again, fruit salad was cool, think his wording was nice too- nice enough to sell the line at least even if it wasn't anything crazy

I mean you could be Goldust’s side-kick...or even side-bitch in that uniform
He looks like the type of nigga that`d pull up on someone ridin on a unicorn

LOL straight clowning, similar to Muff himself somewhat here, I like it

In the shadows I’ve ben stiller than statues waitin for him to make bad moves
The way I see it...if I need cash..I’ma pull a lick & stick`em just like his tattoos

Cool conceptually, not seen that done before so it's fresh to me at least

Damn nigga...what are thoooose!? LOL...I’m dead nigga where is my bouquet
Cause those are the most generic tattoos I’ve seen since I ran out VC on 2k

I didn't get this, can't even lie, it went over my head. Sorry BS

In the words of Riley…nigga you gay…ask him if he’s queer & if he dare lies
I’ll pay his stylist to put clips in his head & this idiot said I love barrettes & hair ties

The clips things been done, you tied it into the picture with the hair ties and whatnot but I wasn't overly crazy on this one. You've done well up to this point though, can't hate

Amen...is this your King up in NY?...Bet you feel like he raps to your soul
I mean I guess it makes sense...because one looks & the other acts like a Troll

Again, kind of cool, tied into the board relevancy with the Amen mention. It's a light jab though here for me personally

You’re bitch made & made for bitches so I bet you get played by the same hoe, right?
I can’t believe you recreated yourself as the live size version of the doll Rainbow Brite

Not so keen on this one in truth, I get it, just felt it needed something more to make it a zinger or some wordplay to add some creativity. As it was it was quite a statementish observation, it needed another element of either clowning or wordplay or hyperbole to make the line pop
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