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patrown · 05-31-2013, 03:05 AM

zygote-
the advance and decline of man , realistically.
my favorite part..

An intense wait overnight, shadows on shrouds as drapes levitate via poltergeist, freeze under weight of the polar ice, passively bound glacial immobilized, orders drilled for the training of soldier types, bayonets raised up to shoulder height, barbedwire psalm-choir played where the notes reside.

rhymed so0 well , covering quite a few different bases with eloquent predictions. somehow, i was happy being mad the verse was a paragraph. anyway, i bet that's exactly how it will go down. covered a few inevitable outcomes of current situations, haven't seen this done, probably won't be done better.
most powerful line..
born for slaughter on the forest floor
i appreciated my thumbs, for a moment. the end highlights a topicals place in rhyme. inspiring timeless thought. enjoyed that after the impressive speculations. couldn't refute a single prediction if i tried.
nigma-
favorite bars..
Within I see the work of evil serpents, the demon snake spiral upwards into DNA
Eyes of the snake became two stars, all other light was beamed away
As constellations teamed I laid awake while sleeping and was deep in space
Galactic scenes were made, it showed me endings and I'd seen creation

overall, this piece was really fucking cool. had a tone i bought into fast, i read about consciousness-tea and didn't blink an eye. achievement. exactly what happened with the drinking of the tea, i'm not sure.
i'm guessing man is the teacher and student, helping itself out on a single plane of space/time. enjoyed the way you illustrated it, thoroughly. pretty damn mystical.great storytelling.

/v zygote - both concepts were hugely entertaining, but i'm making the call for zygote because of impeccable word choices. nigma could have cut out some prepositions/pronouns for an edge imo. topic nailed equally hard by both.

05-31-2013, 03:05 AM	#11
patrown ‹^›ô¿ô‹^› Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 596 Battle Record: 13-19 Rep Power: 0	zygote- the advance and decline of man , realistically. my favorite part.. An intense wait overnight, shadows on shrouds as drapes levitate via poltergeist, freeze under weight of the polar ice, passively bound glacial immobilized, orders drilled for the training of soldier types, bayonets raised up to shoulder height, barbedwire psalm-choir played where the notes reside. rhymed so0 well , covering quite a few different bases with eloquent predictions. somehow, i was happy being mad the verse was a paragraph. anyway, i bet that's exactly how it will go down. covered a few inevitable outcomes of current situations, haven't seen this done, probably won't be done better. most powerful line.. born for slaughter on the forest floor i appreciated my thumbs, for a moment. the end highlights a topicals place in rhyme. inspiring timeless thought. enjoyed that after the impressive speculations. couldn't refute a single prediction if i tried. nigma- favorite bars.. Within I see the work of evil serpents, the demon snake spiral upwards into DNA Eyes of the snake became two stars, all other light was beamed away As constellations teamed I laid awake while sleeping and was deep in space Galactic scenes were made, it showed me endings and I'd seen creation overall, this piece was really fucking cool. had a tone i bought into fast, i read about consciousness-tea and didn't blink an eye. achievement. exactly what happened with the drinking of the tea, i'm not sure. i'm guessing man is the teacher and student, helping itself out on a single plane of space/time. enjoyed the way you illustrated it, thoroughly. pretty damn mystical.great storytelling. /v zygote - both concepts were hugely entertaining, but i'm making the call for zygote because of impeccable word choices. nigma could have cut out some prepositions/pronouns for an edge imo. topic nailed equally hard by both. Last edited by patrown; 05-31-2013 at 04:07 AM.