[PancakeBrah]

'Of his coffin' to 'interpret' and 'just to reach' to 'patience' were the highlights, schematically and 'flow' wise. You have a pretty high floor in terms of rhyming and technique, but nothing was astonishing. The writing, overall was pretty damn solid, creative in a lot of spots. Reminds me of Frank, a little bit. It is kind of weird seeing all of your overtly topical pieces in OM. This reads like a piece that would have been nominated for HOF in the heyday of texting, before the Netcees era. Heyday in activity, if not stylistically. I can appreciate that this piece was a topical but when it's in OM against the best it just seems out of time almost. I enjoyed reading it. The narrative and concept were fine, for the medium. A lot of first person stuff which seems to be the crutch of the form. The tidy little twisty ending. The reliance on font, or centering, bolding, colors, etc isn't my cup of tea. Tight, and exacting. Well executed. Lacked insight, a bit broad. A good contribution. Thanks