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Old 04-11-2018, 11:56 AM   #2
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I approached the stone sarcophagus with caution, it was old,
gnostic, long since forgotten like the scrolls of Tutankhamen
I grew nauseous, the stench from his carcass made me sick
I started coughin, it was rotten almost toxic couldn't hold it ...
had to vomit! Broken bones in rows of carnage lined the bottom
of his coffin; as cryptic hieroglyphics started shifting on it's surface
some were Coptic, some were Persian, some were ancient ...
forms of cursive, all were curses, that's for certain, I was lernəd
in the verses of the esoteric churches, so some text I could interpret
as I read it with a purpose sweat was dripping from my turban ....


Fuck my life... the way this bounces back in forth in rhythm and rhyme is so perfect. I love the transitions and how they are literally effortless. Your mind has a way of combining high-level rhymes that have significant descriptive value and depth to your pieces.

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"His emergence was imperfect, slimy Serpent, who was worshipped
in the darkness where he dwelled, bringing murder to the Cherub ...
as he lured them down to Hell! Who disturbes him? State your purpose
or be burdened by his spell! Forever churning in the furnace where the vermin
burn and wail!"


Executed to a T... utter brilliance here.

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"It is I, a humble scribe, a man of "science" and of lies, a dark magician
on a mission come to rid you of your binds! Traveled far & traveled wide
across the seas and great divide, I climbed the mountains to their heights
just to reach your ancient shrine! It took me ages to unwind the pagan
language that did hide your location in its twine, but with patience ...
I did find this latent station just in time to testify before the alter of ...
'The Dayless Ageless Night' to give you life; a sacrifice, in exchange
you'll pay a price, you give me sight and make me wise like the Fate
the takes the Eye! The 3 combined! If you oblige I'll break the chains
upon your mind and set you free in open skies to rain a plague ...
upon my kind! So yay or nay? I will obey! Just make a statement
Or a sign!"


HOW SWAY!? It amazes me that you can take a conversation in your topicals to new heights with how the rhymes and transitions are structured. Again, as I said before, the delivery of the material is within the word usage and word choices. I have no idea how you continue to grow and impress.

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I obeyed without a qualm; took my blade and cut my palm
smeared the blood upon his skull until his face was like a pond
broke the chain that donned the charm then I placed it ......
under arms that were stretched acrossed his chest as if
a mummy was embalmed! ... As I sung the sullen song
That King Solomon forbid called the 'Necromancer's Kiss'
and the second that I did I saw Death release its grip ...
when his eyes slightly flickered and his hands began to twitch!
As the stench dissipated he awoke inside the crypt!
Fuckin' imagery is insane here...

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Tattered robes were all restitched and his skin grew anew
like a cobra in the pit! Had a humanoid face .....
if you mixed with an imp's and a snake's forked tongue
with 2 eyes that looked like slits; stood about 6'6 & 160lbs
razor blade fingernails, gray complexion like a cloud
all his hair draped down like a blanket or a shroud
as he levitated towards me at a pace that was profound!


The imagery continues on this, rising.

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"The Dweller has awoken from a slumber that was deep!
You have freed me from the dream & released me from my sleep!
And for this evil deed I will give you what you seek!
The wisdom of Tuhuti, Beelzebub, and Loki!"

Two dozen centuries down .. 40 bodies in the dumps
I became a president by the name of Donald Trump!
Some people think I'm dumb like a novice or beginner
but they thought the same thing when I started off as Hitler!
Vlad was a favorite, and Ivan was a kill'a, but the life
I most liked was a tyrant named Attila!!!


I had no clue where this was going. Then you dropped the POTUS on me. How you connected that made it seem so simple BUT it wasn't. I'll be honest, how you developed that story out of such a simple idea is so creative and original. Self, I've known you for a long time, and specificially seek out your drops daily to read them. Your content is constantly mind blowing and we have the pleasure of being your audience. For free no less! Excellent work my friend.
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