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Originally Posted by Jabari Black
I’m wild for real. I’ll go to NY kick his door down, pointin a few sticks at em/
Wont even kill the nigga - just make him log on and vote on my 2trip battle/
Funny, but not an effective punch
Since y’all say I’m Nick James I’ll take Nick Carraway and whatever guns that lame has/
Then ride on Jae. Gatsby killin em. Cops won’t know who did it...they only found James’ Gats/
Too predictable & overly worded
Ya bae’ll get smashed. I put a fist in her for Black Power after she sat on the wood/
Once she gag and lick the sack she take Black kids like defax in the hood/
Similiar concepts have been done before. I remember having a DCFS bar a while ago
Nigga you look like K-Fed - what the hell this clown gon’ do to me?/
Shotty and a 9 - I’ll air both n give u bucks after the mill...thats gratuity/
Again decent, but it's been done before
Mac-10 in the JACKet turn em Queen. Gun line King but u’ll scrap thinking ya boys’ll rush/
But a nasty hook’ll be my Ace in the hole cus my hands the best - royal flush/
Poker card concepts most def have been done to death
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Originally Posted by Lyfzaa Gamble
I move sleek, ask Balor and The Bullet Club, my punch Too Sweet......
Im Fabolous with the hands, only it wont take me 7 swings to knock out your front 2 teeth!
Good, but clean up your wording
I Buck Shots like Giannis, if u mention the best?......
I tell this bitch Jabari Parker ass in the back..with the other scrubs.. At the end of the bench.
Same as above, it's cool, but could've been crazy w/ more concise wording
With the hands I'm clever with sets, never the less always connect wit a left......
Facin me? Jabbin a tough position to get dropped in seconds...im like the McGregor of text!
Clever concept, but not quite harsh enough
Hes destine to feel the wrath of a God...Your trash immediatly have to just stop....
Blacklisted a bunch of unworthy attempts....just to suffer the same fate by the Admin after he dropped.
Naw subpar closer
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Overall JB has to focus on fresher concepts, got to keep in mind that text has been around for 20+ years innumerable amount of bars, therefore you're not saying shit new lol. As for Gambe I liked your concept a lot, but that wording prattles on too much & takes away from the impact of potential dope punches. Comparing the two, even w/ the unpolished wording & one less bar, Gamble had more working for him,
VOTE GAMBLE.