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Old 04-03-2018, 06:40 PM   #4
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This was like the Advanced Version of your previous piece. From the beginning to 'aloof' and from 'Pass the blame' to the end were note perfect. The second line and the 'I see her' section were my personal favorites. Really good. 'Childlike and cautious' was a lot of syllables for a hard rhyming transition after the beginning. My only complaint. Thanks for the read.
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