[Destroyer]

Cyrax got this with a better-crafted verse though neither verse was good
Since this is the general consensus, and other dude wants feedback, I will focus on that
Ok so your concepts are kind of there but you write too much for the rhyme
For example, the spinal cord bar like that’s two punches in one bar but they’re not related t all so neither really hit
Like the spinal cord is one, “I got your back” that’s a decent concept and could hit with a setup that was related to having his back
Then the Loyola making it to the final 4 being a reach, like him beating you also is, that is a decent concept I mean it needs something clever to really hit cause it’s pretty basic, but with a related setup, it could be ok.
You have both of these in one bar because spinal cord rhymes with final four and there’s really no reason.
I hope this helps

V/cyrax