Netcees - View Single Post - bleak 3-7 vs Plot 1-2

Jabari Black · 03-23-2018, 10:21 PM

Bleak

Justice League scheme was decent. Basic but decent. I liked the circle get erased with one finger bar. Not gonna lie, I hated that tekashi 69 bar lmao. Maybe I’m tripping but I felt dumb af reading it out loud lol. The closer landed.

Plot I think you completely wasted your opener. I didn’t pay attention enough in school to know hummingbirds fly backwards lol. I used context clues though. I didn’t think it was that great though - too simple. Snowman bar was decent. I think you had an opportunity to build up that punch a bit more. Didn’t really care for your closer.

Bleak took this one. Punched every line and overall I liked your verse. Plot you wasted your opener which you can’t do when you only going 8 bars. Even then, I think Bleak’s punches landed harder and he had a overall better verse.

03-23-2018, 10:21 PM	#6
Jabari Black Sun Tzu Join Date: Mar 2018 Location: Atlanta, GA Posts: 550 Battle Record: 13-6 Champed - Battle Arena League - 1-2 Punch League - Netcees Battle League - Netcees SOL Rep Power: 12764499	Bleak Justice League scheme was decent. Basic but decent. I liked the circle get erased with one finger bar. Not gonna lie, I hated that tekashi 69 bar lmao. Maybe I’m tripping but I felt dumb af reading it out loud lol. The closer landed. Plot I think you completely wasted your opener. I didn’t pay attention enough in school to know hummingbirds fly backwards lol. I used context clues though. I didn’t think it was that great though - too simple. Snowman bar was decent. I think you had an opportunity to build up that punch a bit more. Didn’t really care for your closer. Bleak took this one. Punched every line and overall I liked your verse. Plot you wasted your opener which you can’t do when you only going 8 bars. Even then, I think Bleak’s punches landed harder and he had a overall better verse. Last edited by Jabari Black; 03-24-2018 at 09:44 AM. Reason: Typo