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Old 03-18-2018, 07:08 AM   #7
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LOL @ a tie, what a complete faggot Gamble is

I'm a real motherfucker not afraid to cast the first vote so let me show you how this done pussies:

Barcotic - Poke a Haunt is works fine in my accent but I can see some people saying it doesn't. Fire IMO. MRI/'em are eye opening was dope as well, two solid punches off rip and worded really clean. I fuck with it. I wouldn't pronounce Usada the same way you might but that's good, I can see it working in your accent definitely. Babysit is another good concept, I think maybe the wording didn't fully do it justice though here around the wordplay, it sounded a bit paedophiley when read a certain way tbh LOL and I've seen them young girls you be posting. Inf Adele again works completely fine for me with a pause in there, I haven't seen this done before either so I give it props for creativity. Flag football was clean as fuck, worded real smooth. Street Musician was cool but having two back to back gun bars maybe hurt it a little, you know? I'd have tried to space them out more personally and kept it to a varied attack to get more impact from them. Michael Bennett was dope, Mike Holmes was a similar line to the previous but not as good here and again, similar idea but done back to back, I'd have spaced them out throughout the verse to maximise impact. Cop Out was just okay, could have done more with it I felt. Solid verse, real consistent, started off with crazy fire but maybe lost some pace towards the end aside from that Michael Bennett line.

Infiltrate: Nice concept for the opening line, I fuck with it. LOL @ Dr Evil line, that's hilarious clownage right there. Possibly my fave line so far in truth as Barc seemed to take a more serious wordplay based attack rather than straight up clowning. Some might say the Shark tatt thing is played, to me nothing is played if it's done right and done well. This a clear example of that. Hush line was just okay, Omelette was another good personal idea but I wasn't keen on the "skull fractured" wording, just drew it out too long for me, too wordy and could have been cleaner. LOL @ Boof seeds line though, that's cool. Potara Fusion was ill but I can see it being too vague for some people to to get without looking it up. Rick Moranis was nice, Red Wings on your back like a Blood eagle was lost on me, I'm not sure what a Blood Eagle is tbh so I'm probably missing something here. Barbicide was another heater, I fuck with that. Ascension was cool to close. Okay so Inf had LOTD for me with that Dr Evik shit, seemed to keep it consistent throughout where I felt Barc started off crazily then seemed to have petered out BUT reading back through I definitely more of Barcs shit landed stronger than I did Inf's here, it was probably the wording to be honest as Inf seemed to try for too much at times and it ended up convoluting what was a good idea in all the unnecessary details. The omelette/fracture shit off hand here springs to mind. Good idea, just overworded to the point the punch itself lacked something to me while Barc was just straight zingers then into the next one.


Ive got Barc taking this but props to both you guys for real, this is an ill matchup. Much respect.
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