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Lucipher Howlz · 03-14-2018, 10:12 PM

I love the descriptiveness and the imagery. The circumference alone line was good but that scent of cologne line was really dope. That line alone really brought you into the story in a realistic way so to speak. I loved that line. The story took a brutal more hardcore approach which I don't mind at all. I actually enjoy reading these types of pieces. But the way your flow was and how you were wording things in the beginning I would have loved to see this go into a real topical. Maybe make it longer before you drastically turned it into a hardcore ending. But overall I liked this.

03-14-2018, 10:12 PM	#3
Lucipher Howlz Member Join Date: Mar 2018 Posts: 89 Rep Power: 4050152	I love the descriptiveness and the imagery. The circumference alone line was good but that scent of cologne line was really dope. That line alone really brought you into the story in a realistic way so to speak. I loved that line. The story took a brutal more hardcore approach which I don't mind at all. I actually enjoy reading these types of pieces. But the way your flow was and how you were wording things in the beginning I would have loved to see this go into a real topical. Maybe make it longer before you drastically turned it into a hardcore ending. But overall I liked this.