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Old 03-11-2018, 09:55 AM   #17
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Joe's wording defeats him again. Jesus.

Opener had potential.
Next bar was ok but light. Concept as a hole is retired. I mean how many times can people write a bar about their opponents sexuality? See where I'm going with this? Kind of like the I fucked your mom/girl concept.
Box spring concept was ok but your execution was corny and really close to cringe, honestly. Need to be harsh dude.
Flash backs was off.
Closers wording was horrible and the WP was a reach.

Dynamicz

Tony Braxton was an ok concept over worded with a bad execution.
Walmart roll back concept needed more.
Smoke screen was a complete miss.
Tripod was dope.
Closer was ok.

I got DynamiCz with edge here.
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