mr j - first half was dope. i get the vibe of basically just some thoughts structured pretty decent.. u flexed with multisyllables. the ending lacked due to the exact subject not rlly bein clear just left some things uncertain when u had me hooked n wantin to read more.
brokenhalo - hella better than last wk. thats kinda dope to see u improve that much in a wk tbh. this was more of a swag n flow piece then anything but in that aspect it was nice. try tellin a story next time im interested n seein how u do.
MMLP - best one so far. murdered the topic and in an elegant manner. good read
gen - this wulda been great as a swag n flow piece bro. seems to be the trend this week lol
concrete - this was dope. structure wise best ive read this week. flowed smoothly and u nailed the topic.
its hard to pick between MMLP n concrete. the rest were good but they come off as either flexin or swag n flo ish. as far as a topical goes it comes down to mmlp n concrete. both did equally good describin the subject as well as capturin the reader. concretes rhyme scheme n structure actually makes his piece seem more polished tho and ima vote based on that.
vote - concrete
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