Hemingway for these two guys? Perfect.
zygote: I gotta say I actually like the paragraph formatting when it's pulled off well and I thought this was a perfect example of that. One reason I liked this piece was it was extremely descriptive, but even more abstract. Seriously. The first few lines are perfect proof of that. Another thing is your rhymes you subtly added into the middle of lines which I had to go back and reread to catch. I liked that shit lol. Good shit here zy.
Nigma: Each piece I read from you is better than the last man forreal. Dope shit here. There were some lines I didn't like purely because of the wording like the wee parts, but there were other lines that very well written and well worded like the Eden line. The concept here is very nice too especially with the last line of the first stanza being repeated at the end of the piece. Parallel universes? Reincarnation? There really is many ways I took the meaning of this and I'm still thinking on it and I like that. Dope shit Nigma.
This is a tough fuckin battle to vote on. Zygote's piece was damn near flawless as was Nigma's.....but I've gotta go with zygote. This battle could go either way though. Props to both guys.
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