Gamble -- a couple points of criticism -- your lines seem super long-winded. better effect if you are able to make things a bit more compact. Also, that Jadakiss line needs a pause -- why would you be asking a man to kiss another man?? Very weird. Other than that, I didn't understand the Phandumb reference. Your other lines connected well, there just wasn't a lot of impact on the punches. They were pretty basic, and I felt the long lines softened the impact.
Mr J. --- opening couplet had the same problem that LG was encountering with long-windedness. Practice and assists don't rhyme. soft center is ok. comma is ok. closer is throwaway.
I don't know.. I mean, these were equally mediocre. I think there was more potential in Lyfzza's lines though. Really a coin flip depending on what you like.
Vote -- Lyfzza Gamble
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