candy - i get the feeling that speaking in riddles is the point of this piece? kind've unclear and I couldnt connect with the meaning as well as I wuldve liked because you kept spinning me in circles by riddling words lol. its all good.. ur vocab n poetry are the shining points.
2trip - im pretty sure this is telling a story about urself? id like to see you take yourself out of the normalcy of focusing on yourself and broaden ur perspective. Idk tell the story through a fans eyes of the ariane grande bombin in london lol.. I kno thats round ur parts u might relate to that. for this piece though u were easier to follow along with than candy. I felt a hint of emotion n u actually did a good job with the ending.
vote - 2trip
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