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I'm a goddamn indigenous, all natural lyricist. The wrong man to be friggin with. Carry more metal than a Pyeong Chang Olympian.
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I dig the flow/cadance. The punch was well worded, but didn't really land with much force in terms of meaning. But, solid opener overall.
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Rhymes are all slants, amphibian frog rap, I swim in it. And revel in the moment forever when I'm flowin. Your rhymes are pretty basic, with that kinda shitty gay shit. Your style is sitting stagnant while I'm flying, you can find me in a spaceship. Higher than a Great Brit tryna get his teeath fixed, under anesthetic. Lol. You fuckers had a dentist? I'm such an avid swinger and you're a fuckin average pitcher. So it's a deep grand slam when i crush this fly to center. Step inside and get brushed aside like a pesticided insect. You left eyeing lopez, your best rhymes are so dead. I'm the death defying, mesmerising, electrifying dope head.
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I get it. The punches aren't necessarily hard hitting, but it's not only about that. There's are lot of other things going on here than
just punchlines. For instance, flow and sway, swag and bravado, transitional wordplay and solid diction. I get it, because I sometimes write the exact same way. I dig the movement of your words and the never-ending stream of consciousness they follow. It's less mathematically put together than most flex joints seem to be. But, it's also doper than most, because it reads more organic and natural and less contrived. Which is the type of writing I prefer.
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You best arrive with both techs ready and loaded. Cause I'm extra fly it's code red when i am flowin. I send my opponents directly to the grave when the semi is loaded cause I'm heavy with the gauge. I'm every bit enraged slash/gentleman. The laid back penmanship is evident the way Pat enters it in messages.
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The flow is in the pocket. I love the less obvious rhymes like slant and assonance. I think you do a really good job dictating the flow while keeping it all within the meter. The scheme is metronomically synchronized.
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Your brain lacks excellence. My brain packs chemicals that make rap effortless.
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Dope.
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Irregular K-Pax intelligence whenever I lace tracks with medicine. So stay back. Before i go straight HAM, and get in this straight jacket, sentenced to make classics with sentences way savage.
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Eh, the double usage of the "word" sentence didn't really accent a point or deliver anything clever per the end result.
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Head of the main family, already been made actually. Steady get paid rapidly, my pen is in waste management, bitches.
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Cool.
Overall this was pretty solid. The flow was crazy and your articulation is top notch. I dug nearly the entire drop. Minus the "sentence" line. The rest was stellar and full of lyrical dexterity. Skillful. Peace.