Interesting.
Although, to be completely honest, I can't say that I followed your story from A to Z. I understand it's about the Armageddon, but I'm not entirely sure what to make of the sequence of events that happen throughout the the narration. There just doesn't seem to be a clear or linear direction. Most of your ideas read cluttered. With the only thing holding them together being the underlying Judgement Day like theme you explored. In any case, you definitely have a knack for dark and gloomy poetry. This piece in my opinion read like lyrics to a heavy metal song. Which is interesting to the least.
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